Tuesday, October 18, 2011

Car kid

I am a rider and this is my ride,
mirrored and stainless
the so called iron street,
where glass hits a new dimension
and wheels gain a new race,
where buildings divide and fall,
fall and divide,
where every man is alike- a form
of turbo acceleration.

Gripping my hat, I roll it over my head
and they eye me like a comical showoff,
twisting a smile at the corner
of their distorted mouths
“Ain’t funny” cause’ I am a rider
and this is a tough ride.

Stoned-
The city has been sleeping deep,
long, on the steel beds
like a dead
but here I come, to waste away the
concrete roads,
to waste away the night
on my horse, wild.


16 comments:

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

nice take on the prompt, rider! :-)

have a great week ahead!

JJRod'z

Templeton's fury said...

why hello urban cowgirl!

Kathy Bischoping said...

I like "divide and fall/fall and divide" and your parallel structures.

Mary Ann Potter said...

Really well done! Your steel and glass imagery is especially memorable. A nice little ride here even though it was rough! 8-)

Martin said...

I like the vision of an "...iron street, where glass hits a new dimension..."

Catfish Tales said...

Nice, very, very nice!

Tess Kincaid said...

Beautiful write...mirrored, stainless, steel and wheel...

Brian Miller said...

nice...def got an urban cowboy bonjovi feel to this...just amped up quite a bit...smiles.

Berowne said...

"The city has been sleeping deep,
long, on the steel beds."
Very good. For another view of the city, drop by...

Jo Bryant said...

well you certainly took me to a place I had never been - great

Helen said...

This is hip ... cool!

Morning said...

very beautiful.

Susie Swanson said...

What a nice ride. Thank you for taking me along. I love your writing, it is so deep and thought provoking.. Awesome writer..

Dave King said...

This is tremendous. Really good writing and an interesting take on the subject. Over all it comes across as fresh and inspiring.

Caddoc Trellis said...

Made me close my eyes in sympathy...

rch said...

Hi, I enjoyed this a lot and you can really feel the energy of a determined spirit in this one.